Read my maid-of-honor speech please?

my sister is getting married tomorrow (sat)!!! AHHHH!! shes 24 and im 19. here it is (roughly). any input please?

p.s. i havent managed to read it outloud without crying yet.





Id like to welcome everyone here tonight to celebrate the union of john and megan.

I know there is a great number of you who have traveled many miles to be here and I welcome and thank you for joining us.

On behalf of myself and the bridesmaids, megan, you look so breathtaking tonight. This has been a very special, and even stressful, day for us all. You really are the most beautiful bride.

Now, megan is the older sister, so she has had 5 years of memories from before I was even born. But as for me, there has never been a time where i was without a sister. It seems like it was only yesterday that we went trick or treating in matching Halloween costumes, or singing silver bells in two part harmony at Christmas time.

Read my maid-of-honor speech please?
Sounds good. I would take out the stressful day line. Even if it was stressful, don't remind people that it may have been. The speech is right from the heart!!
Reply:I think its absolutely wonderful, But I would most likely remove the stressful part, she might feel bad for having anyone else stress out for her wedding. But other than that its absolutely wonderful. I wish you were my sister. lol

Good luck!
Reply:I started to cry just reading it



NOT trying to be a critic, but there is 1 thing I would change



the part where you said "stressful", I would take that word out and replace it with something like "and very emotional" you know what I mean





I really like it woooo I'm tearing up lol anyways congrats to your sister
Reply:Beautiful...i know your sister will be touched. Good luck and have fun!!!!
Reply:It seems a little babbling. Confine yourself to ten sentences. You really don't need to talk about yourself. It's not about you--it's about you leading a toast to them. The matching Halloween costume is for the bridal shower, etc... not for the wedding.
Reply:Very nice. But I recommend you take out the following;



1. I don't think you should say you used to be a little jealous of her. I don't think this is appropriate as part of a wedding speech.



2. she used to be your beautiful big sister. Makes it sounds like she is no longer beautiful.



3. stress about the wedding. Planning a wedding can be stressful and she may feel bad that she made you and everyone around her feel stressful.



Other than that, it sounds good.
Reply:awwhhhh! its so sweet, its perfect!!! good luck! i could never write anything like that, you will do great :)
Reply:thats beautiful. i was a little teary eyed myself. the only thing i would change is the "used to be beautiful big sister" - instead use "you have always"... and i like the stressul part- it might just bring a chuckle to everyone who knew how stressful it really was. :)

congratulations to your sis!! just take a deep breath- you'll be fine! have fun!!
Reply:I think that its beautiful, and really shows how much you love and respect your sister.
Reply:It seems very heartfelt. I really liked your speech. I like how you added the part about stress and how your sister looks beautiful before the day even happened. : )



Feel free to add more stories. People love cute little stories.



As an English teacher, may I make a suggestion or two? Instead of saying, "You USED to be my beautiful big sister," just say "you have always been my beautiful big sister, but here I am. . . etc." Saying she "used" to be your beautiful big sister makes her sound like she's either no longer beautiful or your sister.



I also thought this sounded a little awkward: "I think it is accurate to say in a lifetime, it is truly a blessing to experience such love, in family and in marriage." Perhaps just make it more to the point and put "lifetime" in a different place. Like, "It is truly a blessing to experience such love in your lifetime, etc."



Hope that helps. And just relax, take a deep breath and speak slowly and clearly. Nothing is worse than writing these great words, working on it so hard, and then no one can hear you. Enjoy the big day, and congrats to you and your sister!
Reply:It's very lovely. I can tell just from reading it how special the relationship with your sister is to you. Your sister will be truly touched. I hope the wedding is everything your sister wants it to be.
Reply:That made me tear up. It's beautiful. Don't worry about crying, your sister will be too! If you get too emotional, just take a second to collect yourself and continue. Good luck!
Reply:thats very nice
Reply:It is so beautiful and you can tell it came from your heart. I'm also nineteen and my older sister is getting married (to a boy named John!) and I am working on mine now, so I know how hard it is to put into words what you want to say. Great job!
Reply:Nice job! I'm getting married soon and would love for someone to say all those kind things about me...I believe that you wont be the only one crying while your reading this, I'm sure your sister will too!



The only thing I would say differently is when you say to celebrate the union I would either say celebrate the marriage or celebrate the coming together of these two wonderful people. To me union sounds so cold and distant, but that's just my opinion.



You may also need to add a little more to the end to make it wrap up, like suggest a toast to the bride and groom and wish their life well and mention something about how you can't wait to create many more happy memories with them in the years to come.
Reply:fOr A FirSt TimEr? ThaT's GreAT.. KeEp iT uP.. AnD teLL yOuR siStEr.. ConGraTuLatiOns.. ^_^
Reply:I don't think your big sister will be able to listen without crying. if i was your sister i would be so proud